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SPILT MILK - EXPLANATION

Today in Mrs Lunn's Literacy Group, we continued learning to write explanations.  We had to look carefully at the picture and then explain what we think was happening.

 

When the milkman delivered the family milk, a strange cat came out of nowhere and sadly knocked over the milk on the deck.
By Alyssa

I think the milkman got one hundred bottles of milk delivered to a family in Auckland.  The cat came to the doorstep and knocked a bottle over.  The cat drank the milk from the bottle.  Now the family had ninety nine bottles.
By Mason P

When the milkman delivered the family's milk, suddenly the cat scrapped his face on the side of the bottle.  Crash!  The milk dripped.  Then he lapped up the creamy milk.  When he finished the milk, he did it to every other one.  Mum said ... "You are in big trouble.  You are supposed to tell us if we have milk.  You are grounded!"
By Ava

One day the milkman delivered the milk and left it on the front doorstep.  Boof!  The kitten knocked over a milk bottle on the step.   Crash! Crash! Crash!  went the milk.  Then there was only five left in the tray of milk.  When the owner came out of the house, the owner said, "Naughty, naughty little kitten.  Stay in the house!"
By Amelia

One day I was going up to my door step.  When I got there I saw some white stuff on the ground.  My brother left the door open and my cat came out and spilt all the milk bottles.  Splash!  The milk went flying everywhere.  It went all over me!
By Reuben

When the milkman delivered the milk, a random cat jumped up on to the door step and tipped over one bottle of milk.
By Samuel

One day the milkman delivered some milk for the family.  A strange cat didn't look where he was going.  Crash went the milk bottle!  The cat was disappointed because he knocked over the milk on the deck.  The cat was hungry.  Then he began to lap up the creamy milk.
By Coltyn

I think the wind spilt the mile over.  and the cat licked the milk.  The milk dripped off the steps and onto the stones.
By Tryton

One day a cat found spilt milk on the door step and he drank up the milk.
By Jed

When a strange cat came along the milkman had no space to put one bottle.  So he carried the six bottles and put them at the front door.  The cat knocked over the milk.  "Oh no!"
By Jacob N

One sunny day the milk man delivered the milk to the family's house but a kitten knocked the milk down on to the concrete.  Then she got told off for knocking the milk down.
By Jacob P

EXPLANATIONS

In Mrs Lunn's Literacy Group we have just started learning about how to write explanations.  Come and have a read of our first attempts trying to explain this picture...

One day I was in mu car and I saw a motorbike.  It was making a skid.  Ducks saw the skid.  One duck sat at the end of the skid.
By April

I think that the duck turned into a motorbike and he had left a black rubbery skid mark.  Then he turned back in to a duck at the back of the skid.
By Geordie

I think a duck flew on a unicycle.  It flipped on a skid mark and at the end of the mark, one duck came.
By Mason P

I think the duck is a motorcycle.  Maybe the duck is a robot instead of a motorbike.  Or a man made a duck robot or maybe a real duck made the skid made.
By Jacob P

The motorbike went to the park and left a black mark.  The duck ran to the end of the black mark.  Then the geese came along to have a little laugh. Another duck came over to have a little laugh too.
By Jacob N

One day a motorbike did a big skid.  The duck sat down on the end of the skid.  Then two ducks came and another duck came too.  Then there were four ducks.
By Bonnie

One day a duck was sitting on the concrete.  The duck was sitting next to a black skid mark.  There were some geese.  The geese were just sitting there.  The skid mark came from a motorbike.
By Coltyn

One day there was a robot duck that had wheels.  Then he skidded.  In the background, there are two geese and another duck.  There are white lines/carparks.
By Jack

One day the Mum duck and the Dad duck took the baby ducks to the car park.  One of the baby ducks did a skid mark in the car park.
By Elliot

CROSS COUNTRY WRITING - BY BOWER

Yesterday was the Cross Country . I came 7th place.  My blood pressure was going to my mouth.  I could taste my blood pressure.  It's yuck.  I wish I was first place, but my my friend came first.  His name was Eden because at the start Eden and Angus were tie-ing but Eden was lucky.  Angus slipped over but Angus still came second.  Eden was lucky.